Sometimes as a minor, you don't have any choices. What ever your parents say or do you must do. No questions ask no concerns about how you feel about it. "We had good", according to my concern in Puerto Rico. We had 2 houses, one of 7 rooms and another one of 2 rooms, a car, food, family, good education. At least that's what I thought, that everything was perfect... When I was 8 years old my parents decided to come to the United Sates because my dad was disabled and wanted to fight the incapacity. I was told, that it was going to be for a small period of 3-6 months. Of course it took over a year or more, because we got kicked out of family's houses and ended up at a shelter. In one year I attended to 5 schools.
I suffered of depression, because it was a hard situation to be inn. As a little girl I couldn't understand why I wasn't progressing in school, I couldn't even make friends because I was afraid of changing again. Why get attached to people I was probably going to not see ever again? Also I got kicked back because of the changes and because of my English. For a long time I was angry at my parents, because they had decided this for me. Not caring of my tears, emotional status. It's always hard for a young person to understand a lot of things. And I wasn't asked at all.
At the time, when I lived in Puerto Rico, I loved the environment and living in front of my grandparents. But then growing up, now, my grandparents are gone. And I no longer see the point of going back, unless is just to visit. I Love my island, and there is no one that reps it Like I do. But at the same time I give thanks to my parents and to destiny because even though I didn't understood back then the reason of our changes of homes and our reasons to stay in the United Sates I grew to be probably better than what I could have living over there. I suffered, cried, even was put with a psychologist for a long time, but I overcame all of that. And now I love my Boston, I wouldn't change it for nothing is this world. My family from my household, my two brothers, sister and dad are all together now. And also my dad and mom are both getting type of medical help they needed. What else can I ask for? Everything happened for good, and for better.
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Alchemy
The transformation of
to be, or not to be.
Growing, maturing,
Becoming a better you.
I was once lost
and now I'm found.
Knowing what you're value is
and who you are.
It will be a transition
of mentality growth
and transformation.
At the end of the day
we all change,
for better or for worse,
hopefully always for better
and never for worse.
Alchemy is finding the person who's right
The better you or your'e better half.
Kiara,
ReplyDeleteGreat story and example of alchemy - seeing this very different move (to a new country), where things got a lot worse before they got better. Leaving the sunshine of Puerto Rico to come live in Boston must have seemed like a step back, not forward. But clearly, and over time, you've come to see this as an upgrade in your destiny. Great job.
My one suggestion would be to strengthen the last paragraph and include examples of why you love Boston so much, what great things have happened, specifically, due to this move (finding a best friend, job, having other experiences...). That wouls strengthen your overall message here.
Your poem is great, but it seems to be just a bit too short. See about doubling the length for next week and spending more time to let it grow and expand. See if you can write it in 2-3 sittings, not just one. Toss it around. Get it dirty. And see what you could add if you wrote it out throughout a week. See the evolution. Expand its length, but also allow its concepts and ideas to expand a bit more... think about losing the control...
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